《食老才知ê代誌》之28

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慢四秒
--《食老才知ê代誌》之28

李勤岸

每遍行到路口
雖然青紅燈好膽講:「好啦!」
我嘛是kā家己講:「慢咧!」

徛tī遐等一秒
等少年ê我
衝出去
死tī無幾伐步ê所在

Koh徛tī遐等兩秒
等青年ê我
衝過去
死tī半中途

Koh 徛tī遐等三秒
等中年ê我
踏出真穩ê跤步
死tī beh到路頭ê彼爿

等到第四秒
慢慢伐出安全ê跤步
慢慢hānn過我少年ê死体
慢慢hānn過我青年ê死体
慢慢hānn過我中年ê死体
慢慢行出我
有氣無力ê性命

2010/4/18 台師大台文所

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Hi,

I'm trying to learn Taiwanese and thought translating your poem would be a good exercise. Here it is.

請指正。

陶忘機

Four Seconds Later
by Li Qin’an

Each time I walk to the intersection
Though the traffic signal dares say “okay”
I tell myself to “slow down”

I stand there for a second
Wait for my childish self
To dash out
And die after but a few steps

Still I stand and wait for two seconds
Wait for my youthful self
To dash out
And die halfway across

Still I stand and wait for three seconds
Wait for my middle-aged self
To step out with firm steps
And die before reaching the road’s other side

After waiting four seconds
I step out slowly with careful steps
Slowly walk past my childish corpse
Slowly walk past my youthful corpse
Slowly walk past my middle-aged corpse
Slowly trudging out
My lackluster life

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Catherine Yen 的評論

This is quite wonderful to see your translation of Taiwanese poetry, you actually did it good enough, I also hope this is a good beginning; I only like to give a small comment that Lee's 好膽 herewith in second line implied a certain mode of challenge and somewhat personalized by the poet, Taiwanese language got its unique state, is different from Mandarin's, and we do hope you like to read and enjoy Taiwanese too. All best!